Taking my dog to town .
In Holidays I Took my Bulldog to Town we Walked Over to
McDonald's we Had lunch There
Then After that We went to the skatepark before it got
dark we went home To have some dinner
It was fun And it was yummy . Tough
Hi Maui,
ReplyDeleteThanks for posting this story. I wish I had a dog. If you read through this, can you spot where full stops belong? Your next step is to add detail so your readers can have more information. A great way to do this is to use adjectives to say what things looked like, felt like and what you could feel.
Hi Maui,
ReplyDeleteI loved that story about you taking your dog for a walk,but when you said you bran you dog to McDonald did you leave your dog outside or inside just want to know. I like you was committing to take your dog for a walk.I found there was some spots where you didn't put pull stops.Although You did that tiny mistake it was a good story,Bye.Can you come to my blog and comment on my post's that would be awesome ?
hi Maui
ReplyDeleteI am a student from waikowhai primary school that story reminded me of the time I took my dog to town we got to go to the park and we got KFC for lunch I went to go and get some treats for my dog named Tyson. bye Maui see you later. bye