I will be successful when I have:
- Planned my ideas to help me organise my writing.
- Structured my writing with
- orientation (who, what, where, when, why, how)
- sequenced ideas
- conclusion
- Written in first person.
- Given interesting detail
- Written a closing statement to sum up all my ideas
ORIENTATION
Who: Me & my papa
What: Going on an Adventure
When: In the morning
Where: Going down the street
Why:
Papa would do this with his dad.
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Sequence of Events:
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Conclusion:
Had a good day with my papa. Felt good.
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Descriptive words:
Sad and upset
Monkeys screaming.
Birds were singing
Water was rushing
Fell down the waterfall.
Aliens zapping everything
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Connectives (time words)
Firstly
After that
Then
Finally
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“Hands and feet inside the trolley at all times”.
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My Adventure
I was so angry when my Father drop me at Papa’s House. He was always dropping me off . He said goodbye and was gone! That morning I found a photo of Dad and papa when they we’re young. “Hands and feet inside the trolley at all times” Papa told me.I was excited to go on a Adventures.
First We went through the noisy Forest. Monkey’s were screaming.
Then we went down a steep waterfall. The water Was running quickly.
After that we parked up at the park me and papa and had some lunch.
That's where he told me about the alien Zapping everything.
That was a cool story It was getting late so we made our home.
It was a fun day today.
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